Revision notes addressed. Line tweaks, and OUTCOME mom conversation added

Level1/OPENING.ink

@@ -120,7 +120,7 @@ DRUMMER: It's one "wooo" too many for me.
 KEYBOARDIST: You don't like your own personality?
 
 DRUMMER: It isn't my personality. It's the one a human designer decided I should have. 
-DRUMMER: And yes, I detest it. 
+DRUMMER: And no, I don't like it. 
 
 GUITARIST: Energy on drums is a good thing. 
 

Level1/OUTCOME_WHALESONG.ink

@@ -163,7 +163,7 @@ SINGER: Thanks. I'm just doing my best. If I can connect with even one person--
 BASSIST: Well, you did. I was done with music, but I wanted to play with you. You.
 BASSIST: So... your voice made me join one last band.
 
-KEYBOARDIST: //HJ: This is just begging for a short but emotional response from Keys!
+KEYBOARDIST: I will NOT cry!//HJ: This is just begging for a short but emotional response from Keys!
 
 {vocals_whalesong == "Whaleish":
     SINGER: (laughs) So {band_name} will make your career a success or a failure. No problem!
@@ -233,6 +233,17 @@ GUITARIST: And no one can believe in "everything", you know?!
 //HJ: Agreed on the mom stuff. She should come up here, especially if Guitarist was a jerk. VARS => (arc_guitarist == "egocentric") && (vocals_whalesong == "Whaleish")
 SINGER: Yeah. Yeah, you're right.
 
+{(arc_guitarist == "egocentric") && (vocals_whalesong == "Whaleish"):
+GUITARIST: Well. If you can admit I'm right... 
+GUITARIST: I can say that I'm sorry. For bringing up your mom. That was shitty. 
+SINGER: ...you're right about that, too.
+
+- else: 
+GUITARIST: It must be... something... to hear from your mom like this.
+SINGER: It is. Something.
+GUITARIST: I never really gave you space for that. Like, before.
+}
+
 GUITARIST: But I want to be a better bandmate. And a better friend.
 GUITAR: Maybe you'd like to get a drink or something...
 

Level1/POST_PERFORM_WHALESONG.ink

@@ -95,7 +95,7 @@ NOTE: The point of using the temp variable instead of adding/subtracting band_un
 ~ band_unity-- 
 KEYBOARDIST: You said you'd sing for the whales. Why didn't you sing for the whales?!
 
-    + [SINGER: Because I was scared. And I'm scared to admit that.] #PRIVATE
+    + [SINGER: Because I was afraid. And I'm afraid to admit that.] #PRIVATE
         SINGER: I just...realized that I shouldn't.
         
     + [SINGER: I made the right decision.] #PRIVATE
@@ -171,7 +171,7 @@ KEYBOARDIST: "The Whales have the vote, and now the People may have their band."
 }
 
 + What a great review!
-+ The writing did NOT get better[.]. But it's still an awesome review! //HJ: This is a fun trick! The square brackets around the period signal that that is where the choice ends. But once selected, both sentences appear! This is a handy way to have short choices that naturally become longer responses. 
++ The writing did NOT get better[.]. But it's still an awesome review! //HJ: This is a fun trick! The square brackets around the period signal that that is where the choice ends. But once selected, both sentences appear! This is a handy way to have short choices that naturally become longer responses. //MK: Yeah, that's cool.
 - 
 
 SINGER: So, our first song is a hit?
@@ -364,8 +364,8 @@ DRUMMER: Seriously, though. I'm not packing the gear.
 
 KEYBOARDIST: Okay, {name_singer}, {name_guitarist} and {name_bassist}, time for us to "band together" and pack up!
 
-+ Everyone releases a collective groan over {name_keyboardist}'s pun[.] and starts packing.
-+ A couple of you actually laugh at that[.] before getting to work packing up.
++ Everyone gives {name_keyboardist}'s pun a resounding "BOOOOO"[.] and starts packing.
++ A couple of you chuckle at {name_keyboardist}, assuring further puns[.] before getting to work packing up.
 -
 #Transition: packing_up 
 //HJ: ^^I totally just made that up. We're a long way from transitions, but one of packing up the van would be super handy! And could be used after every performance.