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-> OUTCOME_WHALESONG
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=== OUTCOME_WHALESONG ===
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//HJ: I'm thinking this scene takes place a few days later, long enough for the political outcome to happen.
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//MK: Leaving this note here in case I forget it, but it may end up being irrelevant as I read this through. Since this is a few days later, I guess we can decide - if we want to - what the band has shared with each other by this point. Or, since the players have made reaction choices in the POST_PERFORMANCE scene, we can use conditional dialogue here to describe what's happened. For example, if Guitar chose to be selfish, someone chides them about it. Keys can mention their Whaleish duolingo, or something like that.
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#Environment: PracticeSpace
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#PlayMusic: noodling
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#AddChar: Singer, Pose: instrument_playing
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#AddChar: Guitarist, Pose: instrument_playing
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#AddChar: Bassist, Pose: instrument_playing
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#AddChar: Drummer, Pose: instrument_playing
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//HJ: IDEA! Keys enters while the others are noodling...
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#AddChar: Keyboardist, Pose: excited
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#StopMusic: noodling
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#AddChar: Singer, Pose: instrument_holding
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#AddChar: Guitarist, Pose: instrument_holding
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#AddChar: Bassist, Pose: instrument_holding
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#AddChar: Drummer, Pose: instrument_holding
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KEYBOARDIST: It's official! Whales have won the right to vote!
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{vocals_whalesong == "Whaleish":
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KEYBOARDIST: The bill was read out in Whaleish, and the government lady said our song inspired her to do it!
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BASSIST: Well. I didn't think we'd inspire our "government lady".
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- else:
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GUITARIST: Already? I thought they were deciding that next week?
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KEYBOARDIST: Our song must have inspired people to hurry things up!
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}
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KEYBOARDIST: But not everyone likes us. We got an old-timey letter from The Unvoiced.
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KEYBOARDIST: They're mad about "an unwanted vocal performance which was too loud to avoid".
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BASSIST: Congrats, {name_keyboardist}. That's your first noise complaint.
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GUITARIST: It's a badge of honour.
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KEYBOARDIST: It is? Yeah, I guess it means we can't be ignored! Cool.
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KEYBOARDIST: But, I guess {name_singer} is too loud for people who don't speak.
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SINGER: Hey... let me see that.
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{
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- vocals_whalesong == "Whaleish":
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KEYBOARDIST: It's not all bad. They said the Whaleish was beautiful.
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- vocals_whalesong == "Human":
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KEYBOARDIST: They also said we "had no right to speak for the whales".
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}
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{name_keyboardist} hands the note over to {name_singer}. //MK: If we can't "see" how the letter changes hands, we'll have to find a way to be clear about it. //HJ: We can use a description line for now.
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SINGER: Holy shit. This is Mom's handwriting... #PRIVATE
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+ [SINGER: I should tell the band.] #PRIVATE
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-> SINGER_REVEALS_MOM
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+ [SINGER: I'll keep this to myself.] #PRIVATE
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-> SINGER_KEEPS_MOM_SECRET
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= SINGER_KEEPS_MOM_SECRET
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SINGER: ... Maybe the other bands got these complaints, too.
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{
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- (arc_guitarist == "egocentric") && (vocals_whalesong == "Whaleish"):
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GUITARIST: I don't think the other bands' singers have moms in that cult. //HJ: this is resentful, egocentric Guitarist unceremoniously spilling Singer's secret.
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KEYBOARDIST: {name_singer}'s mom is in The Unvoiced?
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GUITARIST: She is now. She used to be a famous vocalist.
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BASSIST: Wait. {name_singer}, is your mom InDulcet? //MK: if we give her a name, we can shortcut all this. Dulcet describes sounds that are "sweet and soothing". //HJ: Sure!
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SINGER: She was. She doesn't use that name anymore...
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SINGER: ...because she doesn't use her voice anymore.
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SINGER: Although {name_guitarist} is the one who should have kept their damn mouth shut.
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~ band_knows_about_singer_mom = true
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-> SINGER_MOM_FEELS
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- arc_guitarist == "humbled":
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GUITARIST: Maybe. And maybe you can ignore whoever sent it. //or something expressing concern
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SINGER: Yeah. Maybe you're right. Thanks.
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//MK: Don't need the below, but it seemed like the place for a private reaction. Can easily turn this into B and K reacting. //HJ: Hmm, since it's just one line for each character, this may work. Let's try it!
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SINGER: Thanks for keeping my secret, {name_guitarist}. #private
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GUITARIST: {name_singer}'s mom must have sent that letter. Why? #private
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KEYBOARDIST: {name_singer} is taking this pretty hard. I'm sure it wasn't personal. #private
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BASSIST: {name_guitarist} knows something. I'm surprised it didn't come out. #private
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- else:
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GUITARIST: Guess they didn't have a problem with the guitar!
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}
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{name_singer} looks down at the letter, thinking... //HJ: Felt like we needed a transition line into Singer's choices. Also, this is the branch where neither Singer nor Guitarist told the band about Unvoiced Mom. So the choices below need the #PRIVATE hashtag and to be in square brackets.
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+ [SINGER: Maybe this is Mom's way of reaching out.] #PRIVATE
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~ arc_singer = "hopeful"
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+ [SINGER: A noise complaint is all I get after five years.] #PRIVATE
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~ arc_singer = "bitter"
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-
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-> BASSIST_IMPRESSED
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= SINGER_REVEALS_MOM
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~ band_knows_about_singer_mom = true
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SINGER: This is from my mother. She's one of The Unvoiced.
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SINGER: She was a big name singer before she silenced herself.
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SINGER: Since then, she hasn't liked me using my voice.
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{
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- (arc_guitarist == "egocentric") && (vocals_whalesong == "Whaleish"):
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GUITARIST: Well, you wanted to get attention by singing in Whale. Guess you did. //HJ: this is egocentric G who is harbouring resentment towards Singer for overshadowing the guitar with Whaleish vocals, and would thus not be feeling charitable towards Singer right now.
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SINGER: Do I have to ask you in advance not to be an asshole?
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- arc_guitarist == "humbled":
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GUITARIST: {vocals_whalesong == "Whaleish": She did say your Whaleish sounded great. Maybe she isn't trying to hurt you.|different response to human-only lyrics.} //or something expressing concern
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SINGER: Maybe not. Thanks. It's easy for me to think the worst with her.
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- else:
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GUITARIST: It's not all bad! She didn't hate the guitar.
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}
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BASSIST: Your mom must be InDulcet. If she's not proud of you, she should be.
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KEYBOARDIST: Your voice is beautiful. I'm glad you're using it.
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-> SINGER_MOM_FEELS
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= SINGER_MOM_FEELS
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+ SINGER: Maybe this is Mom's way of reaching out. #PRIVATE
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~ arc_singer = "hopeful"
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+ SINGER: A noise complaint is all I get after five years. #PRIVATE
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~ arc_singer = "bitter"
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-
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-> BASSIST_IMPRESSED
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= BASSIST_IMPRESSED
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BASSIST: Hey. Any complaint means you hit a nerve. That's a win.
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BASSIST: On the other hand, it's just one complaint.
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BASSIST: I'd have made that song into an attack. An accusation.
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{vocals_whalesong == "Whaleish":
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BASSIST: But you made people hear whales as equals.
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- else:
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BASSIST: But you made people want to listen.
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}
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BASSIST: I'm impressed. Hold your head up.
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{arc_guitarist == "humbled":
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GUITARIST: Yeah. You announced yourself. You announced us. People know we're here!
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- else: //egocentric
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KEYBOARDIST: I'm gonna write you a compliment letter. A good one!
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SINGER: Don't pout, {name_guitarist}. {name_bassist} and {name_keyboardist} are allowed to be nice to me. //haha!
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}
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SINGER: Thanks. I'm just doing my best. If I can connect with even one person--
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BASSIST: Well, you did. I was done with music, but I wanted to play with you. You.
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BASSIST: So... your voice made me join one last band.
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KEYBOARDIST: I will NOT cry!//HJ: This is just begging for a short but emotional response from Keys!
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{vocals_whalesong == "Whaleish":
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SINGER: (laughs) So {band_name} will make your career a success or a failure. No problem!
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- else:
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SINGER: Thanks for telling me. I'll try not to let you down.
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}
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#PlaySFX: Akai_beep
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DRUMMER: You just rented this room for another 24 hours.
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DRUMMER: In case you want to use those hours.
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SINGER: Like, to practice or write a song or something? Why not!
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{name_bassist} heads off into a corner alone and {name_keyboardist} follows.
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#PlayFX: spotlight_right
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//NOTE: ^^This is another command I just pulled out of my butt. When Art is ready, we'll talk about how we're going to achieve this, but for now I'm picturing Singer and Guitarist standing to the right with the spotlight on them, while Bassist and Keys are over to the left.
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{arc_guitarist == "humbled":
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GUITARIST: Hey, {name_singer}. Can I talk to you?
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-> CONVO_SINGER_GUITAR_HUMBLE
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- else: //"egocentric"
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SINGER: {name_guitarist}. We need to talk.
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-> CONVO_SINGER_GUITAR_EGO
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}
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= CONVO_SINGER_GUITAR_HUMBLE
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GUITARIST: I just want to say... I'm not one of your worries.
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GUITARIST: I mean, I won't be. Anymore. I've changed.
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SINGER: I can tell that you're trying. But people who've changed don't just say, "I've changed."
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-> CONVO_KEYS_BASSIST
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= CONVO_SINGER_GUITAR_EGO
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SINGER: You still don't believe in what we're playing.
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SINGER: But you used to be better at faking it.
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GUITARIST: Uh...
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-> CONVO_KEYS_BASSIST
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= CONVO_KEYS_BASSIST
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{name_guitarist} is silent, not sure yet how to respond to {name_singer}.
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#PlayFX: spotlight_left
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KEYBOARDIST: So. How do you want to change the world next?
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BASSIST: Woah. Don't move on so fast. Whales can vote, but humans can vote against them. Every time.
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BASSIST: We did something huge, for sure. But that means we're responsible. Doesn't mean we're finished.
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KEYBOARDIST: I... hadn't thought about that.
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-> CONVO_SINGER_GUITAR
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= CONVO_SINGER_GUITAR
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#PlayFX: spotlight_right
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SINGER: You have to believe in what we do, even when you don't stand out.
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{band_vision == "People":
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SINGER: If we aren't in this together, the people won't be in it with us.
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- else: //"Rebels"
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SINGER: Prove that you've changed. Not to me, or even to you.
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SINGER: Prove it to the people. And they'll know they can change.
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}
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GUITARIST: Hey, I don't know what I believe in, alright! I'm still looking.
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GUITARIST: And no one can believe in "everything", you know?!
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//HJ: Agreed on the mom stuff. She should come up here, especially if Guitarist was a jerk. VARS => (arc_guitarist == "egocentric") && (vocals_whalesong == "Whaleish")
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SINGER: Yeah. Yeah, you're right.
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{(arc_guitarist == "egocentric") && (vocals_whalesong == "Whaleish"):
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GUITARIST: Well. If you can admit I'm right...
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GUITARIST: I can say that I'm sorry. For bringing up your mom. That was shitty.
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SINGER: ...you're right about that, too.
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- else:
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GUITARIST: It must be... something... to hear from your mom like this.
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SINGER: It is. Something.
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GUITARIST: I never really gave you space for that. Like, before.
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}
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GUITARIST: But I want to be a better bandmate. And a better friend.
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GUITARIST: Maybe you'd like to get a drink or something...
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+ SINGER: Maybe. Maybe not. Let's try it and find out.
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SINGER: This might not be smart. But, I should try, too. #private
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~ singer_guitar_grab_drink = true
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+ SINGER: I don't think so. This is up to you.
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SINGER: I'm not getting pulled back into that vortex. #private
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-
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-> SONG_TOPICS_L2
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//HJ: I'm thinking that this scene actually leads right into the Level 2 Practice. All the characters are already in the Practice Room, and since the 2-on-2 conversations will be short and happen in the same space, it makes the most sense that the band starts practice now.
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