diff --git a/OPENING.ink b/OPENING.ink index d733de2..d608a97 100644 --- a/OPENING.ink +++ b/OPENING.ink @@ -2,24 +2,6 @@ #PlayerControlUntil: OpeningVideoDone, JumpToPath: OPENING.FIRST_PRACTICE + [Once the Bandocracy intro video is over...] -> FIRST_PRACTICE - -/* OPENING VIDEO STORYBOARD ideas: - The Bandocracy Theme Song plays... - - LYRICS: There we were in 2051, Hopin’ their spaceship flies into the sun - VISUALS: Moonists escape chaos by blasting off from Earth to the Moon. - - LYRICS: There we were in 2052, We’re on the earth, they’re on the moon - VISUALS: Chaos on Earth! Environmental destruction, protests, market crashes, etc. - - LYRICS: Here we are in 2053; Everybody left, let’s go baby - VISUALS: The original band (Poli-sci Punks?) are on stage performing the Bandocracy Theme Song. Make sure their band name is visible on screen, so players know who they are when our characters mention them in the next scene. - - Show this song reaching the whole world; music notes spread out across planet Earth? - - Fast forward 50 years... song is still playing and the Earth is peaceful, environment is cleaner, and people are happier. - - Theme song continues as VEZ (our Singer) puts ad on bulletin board of music venue - SEEKING MUSICIANS FOR NEW BAND - - Comic book style Character Card of VEZ's deets: name, instrument, likes/dislikes - - Then show Micah (bass), Skyler (guitar) and Fern (keys) coming along and seeing the ad, popping up a CHARACTER CARD for each as they take the strip of paper with VEZ's contact on it. OR to be more modern, maybe scan the QR code. OR we can show character stuff by showing both options. For example, Fern would totally scan the QR code, but Micah would take the paper. And Skyler doesn't need to do either because she already has VEZ's contact info. Maybe show Skyler looking at her device? Interesting! :) - - Then as the song is ending, fade into the characters in the practice space. The idea is that they are playing this song together as a warm up. - -OH! Can the opening video be rewatchable from somewhere? Maybe in the playlist? Or on Harmony? OR at least put the song audio on the Playlist, since the band does play it in practice before writing their own songs. (Maybe the band's final song bumps the Theme Song off the Playlist at THE END, so we don't need more slots. And this would symbolically show how they've changed the world!) -*/ = FIRST_PRACTICE #Environment: PracticeSpace @@ -31,21 +13,13 @@ OH! Can the opening video be rewatchable from somewhere? Maybe in the playlist? #AddChar: Akai, Pose: instrument_holding //We haven't talked about poses with Art yet, so I just called this one "instrument_holding" to signify that they're still holding their instruments but not playing anymore. -VEZ: Wow. That's the best first jam session I've ever heard. +VEZ: Wow. We nailed "Bandocracy" on our first try! -// Mir: Suggestion here Vez says: "Bandocracy, An oldie but a goodie." Could be considered subtle shade at the past relationship with Skyler as well as the song. Also tags the idea that the name of the game is the title of the song that started it all. - - + SKYLER: You're welcome! - //Mir: SKYLE: Are you talking about me or the song? + + SKYLER: I nail everything on the first try. - // VEZ: Can it be both?? - // cut the head shake - - VEZ just shakes their head. They've heard that one before. + VEZ: Don't start, Skyler. - + FERN: Me too! - //mir suggest FERN: Wow. That's the best first jam session I've played! - // put the complimentary semi naive voice in the person who it fits best! + + FERN: Best first jam session I've ever heard! VEZ: Isn't this your very first band? @@ -55,10 +29,10 @@ VEZ: Wow. That's the best first jam session I've ever heard. MICAH: I haven't played that song since I was in school. -FERN: You were in school when it came out? What was it like? +FERN: You were in school when it came out? What was it like to LIVE HISTORY?! -MICAH: Woah, woah. "Bandocracy" is fifty years old. I meant I learned it in music class. -//mir i think in my headcanon bandocracy is 150 years old because it started the whole movement. It would have the same status as le marseillaise https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/La_Marseillaise +MICAH: Woah, woah. "Bandocracy" is 67 years old. I meant I learned it in music class. +//HJ: I'm splitting the difference, Miriam. Let's say the song is 67 years old - less than 100, but more than 50. But definitely not 150 for reasons I explained on the World page. FERN: Oh, right! Sorry. MICAH: All good. I'll probably forget about this anyway. Because old. SO old. @@ -113,7 +87,7 @@ SKYLER: I'm not breaking up the band. That's a YOU thing. VEZ: No, I left. While we were still Fern's favourite band. + FERN: You did the right thing, Vez! - FERN: I wanted to tell you, but didn't want to make things awkward with my first band. + FERN: I wanted to tell you, but didn't want to make things awkward with my first band. + FERN: You still are my favourite band! FERN: I ship you guys so much! @@ -143,7 +117,7 @@ AKAI: AKAI AND THE MEATSACKS! VEZ: It's a "personality" model. - AKAI: HE! He's a "personality" model. + AKAI: HE! He is a "personality" model. + MICAH: Meatsacks? Touché, Akai. @@ -157,7 +131,7 @@ AKAI: AKAI AND THE MEATSACKS! SKYLER: Ha! It's full of zest! - AKAI: HE! He's full of zest! + AKAI: HE! He is full of zest! MICAH: Yep. Zestiest session drummer I've ever worked with. - @@ -168,7 +142,7 @@ AKAI: Sorry. My "energetic drummer" personality program can be a bit loud. #PlaySFX: Akai_angry //like one of R2D2's angry squawks? Something to indicate his emotion. Could be useful. AKAI: Know that I hate it more than you will. -/// HA HA HA + FERN: You don't like your own personality? AKAI: It isn't my personality. It's the one a human dev decided I should have. @@ -209,7 +183,7 @@ MICAH: Oh, no. We don't have a manager, do we? VEZ: No, we manage together. We play what we want, where we want. VEZ: Well... where we can. And what, ideally, reflects a local zeitgeist-- -// i am not sure people will know what a zeitgeist is. Maybe either a joke to explain, or an easier word. +// i am not sure people will know what a zeitgeist is. Maybe either a joke to explain, or an easier word. //HJ: I'm going to argue that we leave it in, because not knowing this word doesn't affect the player's ability to follow the story. What I mean is, this isn't a turning point or the punch line of a joke, so the player isn't missing anything. Therefore, it's okay if they don't know the definition of zeitgeist. Also, having a large vocabulary is part of Vez's character - as the band's lyricist, that's their thing. #PlaySFX: akai_interrupt //MK: ^^cymbal crash or something. AKAI: LET'S WRECK SHIT!