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Level1/OUTCOME_MOODTATTOOS.ink

@@ -20,6 +20,31 @@ Oh! And the band also got this old-fashioned, hand-written letter. Keys found it
 
 Bassist admits they're kinda thrilled the band's first song warranted a noise complaint.
 
+//HJ: Here, add a choice for Bassist to set arc variable. In Whale Song, these arc variables naturally set during the FAN_REACTIONS section, but in Mood Tattoos that didn't seem to work as well to me. So in the Miro, I put the characters' arc variables in the OUTCOME scene, and this is where Bassist's would go. Actually, Keys' arc can be set here too!
+
+
+    + BASSIST: But I still don't think our song will change the world. #PRIVATE 
+        //HJ: ^^The choice can be private, but Bassist could then say the choice line aloud to everyone else once it's chosen. Hence, no square brackets around this line. However, if you want Bassist to say something different aloud, put square brackets around the choice line. 
+        ~ arc_bassist = "cynical"
+        
+        ++ KEYS: police Bassist's negativity
+            ~ arc_keyboardist = "police"
+        ++ KEYS: cheerlead in response to B's negativity
+            ~ arc_keyboardist = "cheerlead"
+        --
+        
+    + BASSIST: Maybe our song will inspire humanity will do better. #PRIVATE 
+        ~ arc_bassist = "hopeful"
+        //HJ: To trigger Keys response to this, someone needs to be a downer! Probably Akai. He's probably disillusioned with humankind.
+        DRUMMER: brings things down; humankind is never gonna do better. 
+        
+        ++ KEYS: police Akai's negativity
+            ~ arc_keyboardist = "police"
+        ++ KEYS: cheerlead in response to Akai's negativity
+            ~ arc_keyboardist = "cheerlead"
+        --
+    -
+
 Keys, who wasn't sure how to react to a noise complaint, follows Bassist's lead - the band's debut made such a spash it riled people up! Cool!
 
 Bassist reads the letter aloud. It's from The Unvoiced, who feel like they were SUBJECTED to an unwanted vocal performance by {band_name}.
@@ -27,14 +52,14 @@ The other performances were instrumental or electronic...but no one said we coul
 
 //MK: You didn't mention when to reveal it, and it was used as Singer's secret in your Miro, so I'll put it here.... 
 Singer admits they know that the Unvoiced created Mood Tattoos. That's why they were there.
-//MK: Does feel a bit clunky, though. We should massage the Unvoiced secret.
+//MK: Does feel a bit clunky, though. We should massage the Unvoiced secret. //HJ: Agreed. Let's have one of the characters mention the strange silent people at the event in the POST_PERFORM_MOODTATTOOS scene, to set this up.
 
 {
-- vocals_moodtattoo == "Whaleish":
+- vocals_moodtattoo == "Anti-Tattoo":
     That explains why they're saying we "are trying to destroy the beauty of non-verbal communication and encourage verbal conflict".
     
     SINGER shrugs - that was the whole point. They should be happy we didn't call them out by name.
-- vocals_moodtattoo == "Human":
+- vocals_moodtattoo == "Pro-Tattoo":
     Well, they're still mad about our vocals. Even though we supported mood tattoos, we "reduced them to a simplistic mood-ring equivalent fad".
 
     Oh, well. The crowd loved it. And they may not have, had SINGER named The Unvoiced.
@@ -48,16 +73,17 @@ Singer looks at the letter.
 
 SINGER: recognizes Mom's handwriting... should I tell the others? #PRIVATE 
 
-    + SINGER: Tell bandmates my Mom wrote this. #PRIVATE
+    + [SINGER: Tell bandmates my Mom wrote this.] #PRIVATE
         -> SINGER_REVEALS_MOM
-    + SINGER: Don't tell them anything. #PRIVATE
+    + [SINGER: Don't tell them anything.] #PRIVATE
         -> SINGER_KEEPS_MOM_SECRET
 
 = SINGER_KEEPS_MOM_SECRET
 Singer claims they'd just heard about it somewhere. 
-//MK: I tried to keep the structure from the Whale Song scene so we could keep Guitar outing Singer's mom. In this world, I think Singer would do that if they felt like Singer "forced" them into supporting mood tattoos as a weak attempt to make things up to mom. Mean! If it doesn't work for you, it can just come out. 
+//MK: I tried to keep the structure from the Whale Song scene so we could keep Guitar outing Singer's mom. In this world, I think Guitar would do that if they felt like Singer "forced" them into supporting mood tattoos as a weak attempt to make things up to mom. Mean! If it doesn't work for you, it can just come out. 
+//HJ: That motivation makes sense to me. We'll either need to set a special variable for that (since Guitarist's arc variable is set later in this script), OR you can make this the Guitarist's choice of how to respond.
 {
-- (arc_guitarist == "egocentric") && (vocals_moodtattoo == "Human")://MK:
+- (arc_guitarist == "egocentric") && (vocals_moodtattoo == "Human"): //HJ: Either need a new variable OR turn this Conditional Block into a Choice Block. 
     GUITARIST: From someone in the Unvoiced? Your mom, maybe?
     Bassist guesses who Singer's mom is.
     Singer confirms it, and lashes out at Guitarist for revealing it like that.
@@ -66,15 +92,15 @@ Singer claims they'd just heard about it somewhere.
     -> SINGER_MOM_FEELS
 - arc_guitarist == "humbled":
     GUITARIST asks if Singer is okay.
-    Singer admits that they recognize the handwriting in the letter. It's from mom. Guitarist agrees to keep the secret.
+    Singer admits that they recognize the handwriting in the letter. It's from mom. Guitarist agrees to keep the secret. //HJ: With Keys and Bassist there, will these messages pass between Singer and Guitarist with simple looks and private thoughts? Since they can't say this aloud and still keep the secret.
 - else:
     GUITARIST asks if the complaint mentions the guitar, or did the Unvoiced love it like everyone else?
 }
 
 Singer retreats into their own head for a private thought...
-    + SINGER: Maybe this noise complaint is Mom's way of reaching out. #PRIVATE
+    + [SINGER: Maybe this noise complaint is Mom's way of reaching out.] #PRIVATE
         ~ arc_singer = "hopeful"
-    + SINGER: Even after all these years, Mom can't resist scolding me. #PRIVATE
+    + [SINGER: Even after all these years, Mom can't resist scolding me.] #PRIVATE
         ~ arc_singer = "bitter"
     -
     -> BASSIST_IMPRESSED
@@ -84,7 +110,7 @@ Singer retreats into their own head for a private thought...
 Singer admits to the band that the letter is in their Mom's handwriting.
 
 {
-- (arc_guitarist == "egocentric") && (vocals_moodtattoo == "Human"):
+- (arc_guitarist == "egocentric") && (vocals_moodtattoo == "Human"): //HJ: Same note as above - need to creat a variable tracking Guitarist's previous response, OR make this a Choice Block for Guitarist to respond now. 
     GUITARIST asks if this whole thing was just to apologize to mom for leaving her cult. Looks like it didn't work.
     SINGER explains THIS is why they didn't say anything earlier...because GUITARIST would make it personal.
 - arc_guitarist == "humbled":
@@ -111,7 +137,7 @@ KEYBOARDIST doesn't know who S's mom is, but is glad she didn't stop SINGER from
 = BASSIST_IMPRESSED
 Bassist reiterates that getting a noise complaint is a win. It means the song's message had impact! 
 
-{arc_guitarist == "humbled":
+{arc_guitarist == "humbled": //HJ: Either use variable created in previous scene, or if you went with the Choice Block option above, put a label on one of those choices so we can check here for how Guitarist responded.
     Guitarist backs up Bassist's sentiment and supports Singer, agreeing that so far Singer is leading the band well.
 - else: //egocentric
     Keys agree with Bassist, but Guitarist is silent. 
@@ -122,7 +148,7 @@ Singer thanks them for the kind words, being super modest about it, but Bassist
 
 Bassist admits that Singer is the reason they joined this band, which will be their last band, one way or another. 
 
-{vocals_moodtattoo == "Whaleish":
+{vocals_moodtattoo == "Anti-Tattoo": //HJ: I think the Anti-Tattoo lyrics would make Singer most confident. 
     Singer has the confidence to laugh off the pressure. 
 - else: 
     Singer feels the full weight of Bassist's expectations.
@@ -132,7 +158,7 @@ DRUMMER: ...reminds everyone that they're renting this practice space. Are we go
 
 Sure. Band starts getting ready.
 
-{arc_guitarist == "humbled":
+{arc_guitarist == "humbled": //HJ: Again, use the new variable or label here. 
     Guitarist pulls Singer aside.
     -> CONVO_SINGER_GUITAR_HUMBLE
 - else: //"egocentric"
@@ -148,7 +174,7 @@ Singer shares that they did notice Guitar making an effort, but they were still
 = CONVO_SINGER_GUITAR_EGO
 Singer asks what the hell that was about?
 {
-- (arc_guitarist == "egocentric") && (vocals_moodtattoo == "Human"):
+- (arc_guitarist == "egocentric") && (vocals_moodtattoo == "Pro-Tattoo"): //HJ: Just a note here to use the new variable or choice label here instead of the arc_guitarist variable.
 Guitarist accuses Singer of forcing them into a pro-tattoo stance just to get a message out to mom. Now G is stuck supporting something they don't believe in. again!
 Singer swears it wasn't the case. This was not about mom.
 
@@ -164,25 +190,25 @@ Singer accepts G's apology, but worries they're just in this band for themselves
 Uncharacteristically, Guitar is silent, not sure yet how to respond to Singer. Camera focus shifts to... 
 
 BASSIST and KEYBOARDIST discuss their differing views on hope. Keys doesn't understand anyone losing hope in anything. Bass explains that they felt that way once, but now...they're retiring. This band is their last kick at the can. No matter what.
-Keys wonders if Bass gave up hope too soon...even if it happened years ago. What changed? Bass explains - nothing. That's the problem - people don't change. No matter what your music says.
+Keys wonders if Bass gave up hope too soon...even if it happened years ago. What changed? Bass explains - nothing. That's the problem - people don't change. No matter what your music says. //HJ: You should vary this conversation based on the arc variables now set earlier in this scene. 
 
 Keys isn't sure about what the music said...
-{vocals_moodtattoo == "Human":
+{vocals_moodtattoo == "Pro-Tattoo":
 The song was fun...but the cause just didn't seem big enough.
 - else:
 The song they played was just too negative. 
 }
 Maybe this band isn't the right fit...
 Bass explains that they won't be 100% onside with everything, but if they quit everything at the first sign of trouble, they'll never feel like they're part of something. 
-You should only quit after a long career drains the energy out of you. That's a joke. Keys laughs.
+You should only quit after a long career drains the energy out of you. That's a joke. Keys laughs. //ha!
 
     -> CONVO_SINGER_GUITAR
     
 = CONVO_SINGER_GUITAR 
  
-{vocals_moodtattoo == "Human":
+{vocals_moodtattoo == "Pro-Tattoo":
 Guitar admits - they're worried about revealing their true feelings with a mood tattoo. What if they haven't truy changed? But they just played a song encouraging people to GET them! Doesn't THAT make them a fraud anyway?
-Guitar thinks that G is only a fraud if they lie about what they feel. Do they feel badly because of what they did, or because they got caught?
+Singer thinks that G is only a fraud if they lie about what they feel. Do they feel badly because of what they did, or because they got caught?
 - else: //"Rebels"
 Guitar expresses frustration with the critic who called them out. Will they have to carry past mistakes forever? What do people want from them?
 Singer suggests it's more about what Guitar wants from themself. Do they want to change, or just forget about the past?

Level1/POST_PERFORM_MOODTATTOOS.ink

@@ -97,11 +97,22 @@ BASSIST jumps in...
     + GUITARIST: Be the bigger person. #PRIVATE
         Says they'll be the one to rise above their petty personal feelings. Damn!
         ~ mood++
-    + GUITARIST: this is already personal #PRIVATE
+    + (PERSONAL)GUITARIST: this is already personal #PRIVATE
         They didn't know they could all just do what they want. They'll remember that.
         ~ mood--
     -
     
+//HJ: This is the Pro Tattoo stance, so Keys would have something to say since they're pro mood tattoo. Keys would also respond if Guitarist makes it personal. You can add a label to Guitarist's choices (okay, I just did that!), and use that label like a variable adjust Keys' response... 
+
+KEYS: {PERSONAL: Responds to Guitar making it personal.|Responds to Guitar rising above.} //HJ: This way for a one-line response. However, if there are more lines, create a Conditional Block. 
+
+{PERSONAL:
+    KEYS: response 
+    GUITARIST: response 
+- else:
+    KEYS: response 
+    GUITARIST: response     
+}
     -> BAND_UNITY_CHECK
 
 //NOTE: If band went into the performance with the highest unity score of +4 , but made all the negative choices in these dissenter stitches, the highest score they could have now is +1 , which is why that is the number we're checking against in the stitch below...
@@ -117,7 +128,6 @@ BASSIST jumps in...
 }
 
     + SINGER: I'm glad that worked out. #PRIVATE
-        //HJ: I know there are a LOT of different ways the dissenting scenes could have played out, but this choice's main purpose is to set Singer's mood variable, so keep the choice lines super general. 
     + SINGER: That was a mistake. #PRIVATE
     -
     -> REVIEWS
@@ -138,6 +148,8 @@ KEYBOARDIST: the All for All folks all got mood tattoos during the show, and now
 SINGER is praised for "uncharacteristic" fluffy positivity. They don't know how to feel about that.
 
 }
+
+//HJ: Here is a decent place for one of the characters (not Singer) to mention the strange silent people at the event, to set up The Unvoiced noise complaint letter for the OUTCOME scene.
     -> FAN_REACTIONS
     
 = FAN_REACTIONS